Trying a shot at poetry...
A Toast to Life
To the years that we had lived;
Every second, minute, hours and days.
To the memories that will never part;
Joyful, nostalgic, devastation they will remain.
To the hopes and dreams that others have on us;
Parents, colleagues, friends that will push us on.
To the experiences that we attained;
Through knowledge, guidance, perseverance.
To the things that we hold dear;
Family, friendship, time hoping they will stay.
To the effort that we put in;
Whole-heartedly, sincerely will bear fruits of utmost sweetness.
To this one life that we are living;
No second chances, no playbacks, regrets aplenty,
Throughout the seconds, minutes, hours and days that we lived
CHEERS!
To the years that we had lived;
Every second, minute, hours and days.
To the memories that will never part;
Joyful, nostalgic, devastation they will remain.
To the hopes and dreams that others have on us;
Parents, colleagues, friends that will push us on.
To the experiences that we attained;
Through knowledge, guidance, perseverance.
To the things that we hold dear;
Family, friendship, time hoping they will stay.
To the effort that we put in;
Whole-heartedly, sincerely will bear fruits of utmost sweetness.
To this one life that we are living;
No second chances, no playbacks, regrets aplenty,
Throughout the seconds, minutes, hours and days that we lived
CHEERS!
Note: This is the second draft that was originally written on the 230604 when I was still in SISPEC.
3 Comments:
Not bad for a beginner ;p ... A straightfoward , plain poetry. Has stenghth on its own but a bit simple. Try to write more wif some metaphore/ emotion/ analogy...
Ok try to write more man... If I got free time i'll give u mine
There's a light at the end of a cave
All alone I was inside this darkness
In my thirst I despaired
In my hunger I cried
But then I met you
You came without a word
But you left me with so many hope
I thought I saw a light
Something bright I never see
There's a world I never saw in you
A picture paints a thousand words
But your face paints a million pictures
Your smile, your gaze reside inside me
And so I keep on walking
Then I reached a hole at the very end
That lead me to your world
Up above there's millions of lights
It's the same feeling I get
When you smile at me
Btw not toking bout u :p
Good poem, at least that what i think..haha..Everyone has their own opinions to life. Poems are subjective, its not abt metaphor, analogy, etc. If it can potray abt how u feel abt sumthin, then its gud. Hahah. Words from a newbie..Anw, i have a poem, this is the first poem that i wrote for sumone. (not u of course, haha)
I noe this girl
She is as sweet as a cake
She, like a swan in a lake
That u'd like to have in this world
Cause u don wanna lose her
U keep her in a safe place, like ur heart
You just wanna treasure the beautiful art
This angel, from scratch, that god has build up
You thinking this sounds so made up
And u realised u ve woken up
And that this graceful swan is the one for u
Oh, yes this is true
U hug her with warmth and comfort
She feels like theres no harm tonight
You say to her gently, "ill hold on to u tight"
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